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[[K]- Deepspace (PREVIEW)]

hmm...

Pretty good. I think if I had a few days to fix this song I could make it amazing...give me a PM what you think about that offer.

DJ Derrick

[[K]- Smoothe Sail]

pretty good...needs more time to be put into it

You have the full version now, you should be able to spend more time on songs. that includes using the mixer properly, adding more instruments, changing things up. All I heard was a bunch of 7th chords being played out, but if you put more time into it, it'll sound more professional. Just a suggestion. I'd say that if you spend a week on one song, it might make it to top tracks ever. that's my emphasis on spending more time, you could do it. I'd like to see this expanded.

p.S. if I sound like a jerk i'm not trying to be. I'm just trying to be quick about this review, and i'd like to expand on some things, but most of it is practice doing new things.

also: go on google, type in "free VST plugins." there you go. the ones that fl gives you get old after a while and everyone else uses them. get like 5 new vst plugins, install them to fl8 and there you go. you've got your own original sounding music. waaaalllaaa! like a magician, only...it's not. lol

DJ Derrick

Korpze responds:

Yeah, Im still working on it trying to put some instruments in it, some dont work, but im keep trying, so.. this is kinda a test, weirdly I spent a day making this. (The wonders you can do w/ full vers.)
Thx for the review yoda, its always good to hear from you.

[[K]- Last Approach]

hmm

I'll give it a higher vote when you master the track.

That is, make sure the dB level in the master mix is below 0. Do this by adjusting individual volume levels, and remove the fruity limiter if you have one on. PM EQ as well. Then you can add them back on after it's properly mastered. Then it'll sound more professional.

Also, the last note in your 8 bar phrase is wrong(2:50 as an example). Please change it, or just change the chord progression to something more smoothing. It's kinda akward. Also, the sudden ending is wierd.

Just things to work on. Keep it up, and don't give up.

DJ Derrick

Also, mess with the bass from (2:35 to 2:40). It's off there. Something's outta tune.

[[K]- DOTA Remixed]

Getting there...

Pretty good.

I would add more things, maybe get the original vocals.

* when i mean things, I mean:

add more FX
more voices
change it up a little
make it longer of a song
I cna't think of anything else, but...yeah.

Concrete song(remix) you've got here.

9/10
5/5

DJ Derrick

Korpze responds:

Vocals are gonna be hard to get. Oh well, ill try to keep working on it. Thx for the review!

[Protection]

ok, I'll review your stuff...

I saw that you like reviews, so...here it goes:

1. The distortion isn't my style, but if you wanted it, then that's your song, but I don't personally like the distrotion thing. So, you might wanna get cleaner songs.

2. Please, please, please...get rid of that crash cymbal. get a better one. I don't care, that's one of those crash cymbals htat when I browse my stuff, i'd say, ew. That's the first thing that you can easily fix with this to make it sound better.

3. Add more FX. this is something that took me a while, and is a little difficult to find that right effect with your song, ya know? but just add two or three FX throughout the song, ya know, here and there, make it lively.

4. Great melody! I like it, but the stutters could have been left out I think...

5. When I first heard this, i was thinking Nintendo. If you want more professional sounding stuff, get some VST plugins. I recommend

Vanguard (great for techno/industrial)
Z3ta+
Nexus
V-Station (great for trance)

Also, go to VIP zone samples to get some more drum samples and stuff. maybe a drum loop...just google it, great free samples site, that's where i get my stuff.

You can really improve this, I know you could...

PM me if you want me to see what i can to for this song, unless you like to just do things yourself.

I would say that you should listen to my stuff, but most of my new stuff is not on here, since i've got those labels now, so i'm not gonna give my full songs away for free. Although, my "Demo" is my newest track. It's a new sub-genre for me, industrial, but i hope i got a good grasp of it. now to move onto trance...he he he.

7/10
5/5 (i'm not a zero voting dick)

DJ Derrick

Prodigal responds:

Woah, long review O.o . Okay, her goes my big reply:

The "Distortion" thing is usually used for techno and dance, like what i have here. Alot of people use it.

I will get rid of the Crash Cymbol, I have been looking around peoples songs and realized its used alot.

Now for the FX. Let me count here... 23 FZ in the Mixer, if thats what ur talking about.

Those "shutters" are actually a little thing called sidechaining, a really good method that some experts use (Envy for example). Thanks for saying its a great melody though.

You related this to Nintendo?! Well, I have 2 out of those 4 (my nexus doesnt work). I have Vanguard in this song actually (the Arpeggiator) but i didn't use Z3ta+ in it.

I'm gonna check out that sitre you mentioned, just to see if thers any good vocals and/or drums.

I will check out ur stuff for sure, just because i like to see other peoples creations. Thanks for voting 5/5, unlike that Spamwangler (LOL) guy. I really apreciate it and i will do the same thing to ur songs.

Keep it flowing,
Dj-Typhlanar

[[K]- Avenged]

pretty good

This is your best one yet. Just thought that I'd point that out.

Whatever made you think this up, keep doing it.

I could tell you what to fix with this, but I'm feeling tired. So, I just gave it an 8 to be fair.

DJ Derrick

Korpze responds:

lol idc. score is just score.
Thx for the review dud

[Another Happy Tune]

hmm...

It's not happy when it's out of tune :(

I'd say to go back and change your synth or change that high note. It's not going major, instead just going flat in that key. Also, lower the volume in FL. I know you used FL...don't be shy...

Good song overall, but make those changes if you want a higher vote than

2/5
5/10

DJ Derrick

admiral420 responds:

HELL YEAH I USED FL!!!!!!!!! I also know that an assload of people here use FL as well. Yeah, i didn't really give much integrity into this perticullar song. But for not even tryin, i'd say it still sounds pretty good. lol

[Stay_forever (2ndTry)]

i see it improved.

This is much better.

I'm kinda sick, so i hope you won't be upset if i leave a short review...

The vocals still sounded kinda off key, but it wasn't enough for me to not like the song. NIce snares.

Ooooo. at 2:43 was amazing, but then the vocals got off key. there are two ways to change this small problem: change the key of the vocals, or change the chord progress you are using to go with the vocals. I would personally go with the second since it's the easier one and won't mess with the original sound. Just when she does that one thing that goes up, put a higher chord in it. Ohhh. now i hear it. she puts in an accidental. lol. if you dno't know enough about music, she goes out of key. that's why. you ahve to put in a new chord there. then it will be on my favs list.

but, for now, it gets

5/5
10/10

you don't have to redo this, but there's my suggestion.

DJ Derrick

DjMontana responds:

Hey DJDerrick...

Hey man.. yeah thnx for the high rating !
But the Vocal chores is good, but she sings abit high, then Low..
It sounds ok, but when the music and The vocal come together it gets abit off.
But for the record thnx for commenting on me, even when ur sick... :D
Thnx ;-)
I`ll try to get it better from now on...

Keep Voting :-)

Greetz DJMontana

["Alone" - F-777]

hmm...

It' s very nice, but I can see that you could mess with this song more. But, you are getting that CD done, so you don't have to make this one more amazing than it already is . :)

The beginning kinda didn't fit with the rest of the song, or so it sounds to me. The groove you get into at around 1:00 is nice and feels good, but one of your synths sounds off with the rest of the song. It's like, its delay or something, kinda turns me off if you know what i mean.

Nice little FX at the end. Kinda like the ocean breeze. That could be a more fitting name, i think. "Alone" is a good title, but unless that's how you are feeling right now, "Ocean Breeze" would be a great fitting title.

Just making some suggestions here.

Also, just to say on here, i'm too lazy to give you a PM, but i just was told that i'm accepted to join another record label. So now, i've got two labels: 1 w/ dannyNergy and the new one is just me! w00t! It looks pretty promising I think. I still gotta look at the contract and stuff, but looks legit.

Keep making music, man! ...I wish I would find my groove. I'm still experimenting. I just realized that some artists are so good at making one certain kinda music, and yours is dance/techno. More dance, though. Some trance, mostly dance. I meant not to rhyme, I don't do it all the time. lol

Well, I'm gonna go eat a roflburger while wearing my lollerskates.

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Now, just to wrap this review up:

1. Change/edit the beginning (if you want, don't have to) to where it fits the rest of the song.

2. change the title to "Ocean Breeze" or something like that.

3. Put that FX in the beginning maybe (just a slight suggestion)...

4. umm...make it more amazing. put taht F-777-ness into it.

5. That one synth sounds out of sync. i hope you know what i'm talking about, it kinda started to bother me, but that's just my taste.

6. make the bassline more interesting than just offbeat bass notes....don't have a suggestion there, just is an idea to put in your head.

Well, I hope this helps you, or I would feel like a jerk now for talking about this song. I've listened to it 3 times by now...lol

ok, keep it chillin.

Derrick

9/10
5/5

F-777 responds:

Thanks man! Ya this isn't one of my best at all...this was just a quick 2 hours spent on this =P. Thanks for the awesome super long review!!!

[Stay_Forever]

hmm...

I like the overall song, but has a few spots that I noticed that could use some more tweaking...

I mean, is this the final version of this song? Or were wanting some advice to improve this?

I'm not much of an expert, but i noticed that near the beginning, when the vocalist was repeating a bunch, it sounded out of tune really bad. Was this builded tension? If not, then I would put it a few cents flat. Would sound better I think...

Also, I was hoping for actual words :(

The beginning set it up so well, but I was disappointed that all you used was the vocals that could be used before and after a verse/chorus...

Otherwise, good work.

DJ Derrick

9/10
5/5

DjMontana responds:

Hey derrick....

Yeah mostly youre wright... but it`s also more like my own way off building it up...
But for the record i can try too resample those vocal sounds.
I`ll Submit this track again soon, with the vocals better tuned... Thnx for the advice..

Greetz DJMontana