Eh...
PUT A DISTORTION TO YOUR KICK! HAHAHHAHAHAHHHA
jk dude. That's wack. Anyways, onto the review:
All I have to say about this track is that it's pretty good but I'm not sure how long you've been producing and also don't know what program you're using...but I wanna say FL cause it's as fruity as you can get, which to some degree you can't help. But, you can do this:
Get better quality strings. Get edirol or a better setting on hypersonic (that is, if you are using FL.) They sounded fruity.
EQ this friggin' track. It's peaking some, just a bit. My ears are hurting...and I got my nice headphones on, so I HEAR ALL. lol jk about that, but it does sound like you do indeed need to EQ and prob re-master this. Sounds like the filters are a cause of this. Stupid filters. lol
Get a better lead synth. Sounds like "McTrance" to me. lol again, I've made my fair share of that, but I know better now...lol. So you ask, what does that mean? Get rid of just plain saws. It's too "saw-y".
Make the track mixable? That's an option, just sayin. And that means get a better ending. lol It kinda just dies at the end...
Also, mix up the offbeat bass line? lol That's an option, i suggest it...
Nice melody and progression. It just needs better synths in my opinion. Maybe you're going for a weird sub-genre of trance, but otherwise...
And that's how I give it a "ehh..." rating. Not sure what that means, it's not OMG IT'S THE BEST THING I HAVE EVER HEARD! or DUDE! THIS SONG SUCKS!. It's way closer to the first, but it's not quite there yet. lol
Judge me off of this if you want, but it's my opinion. There is no right or wrong to music, it's just how I see it and what I would change if I were you...that's all.
Derrick