Yodamanjaro's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[AF+T888 - Astral Dream]

Meh

These sounds come across as...generic. A term that comes to mind is "McTrance." You hear the combination of these sounds and instruments a MILLION times (yes, that's a big exaggeration, but I'm sure you two get my point).

Some things to do with this (to un-make it McTrance):
- Scrap the song and forget you ever heard Tiesto and other McTrance artists (after the early 2000s Tiesto, of course).

OR

- Make the saw pads a bit less constricted. Yes, this will change up the sound, that's the WHOLE POINT of not making it McTrance.
- DON'T use presets. You can't lie to me here and say you guys didn't cut corners with this and "make" your own sounds. Flipping one knob in Nexus doesn't cut it.
- Make the song LONGER. 2:45 is a shame, and should probably be around the 5-7 minute mark. If you guys are serious into making real trance, that's a big point to take in. As much as the listeners on NG hate longer tracks, I prefer a good length to a song. This includes a longer breakdown, and not just something in the beginning to "catch" the listener so they don't zero bomb your track.

Oh, and congrats on the top 5, this isn't complete crap, so you've got that goin' for ya. If you would like to argue anything I just said, please do so in a PM and I'll be happy to discuss it. Also, if either of you want more pointers on this, I'll be glad to help you out.

7/10
4/5
Derrick

[Ravers Fantasyv2(757irish Rmx)]

You're right on the edit.

LOL DJ Viz FTW!

This isn't bad, but it's too "fruity." If you would like to either a) know what this means or b) know how to fix it, or c) both, then PM me. I'll be glad to explain.

6/10
5/5 (just because it's right to do)
Derrick

757irish responds:

Always open for suggestions :D just pm me

[Dreamscape - To The Stars]

pwned

We see what you made. Not top 5 worthy. I agree with the guys right below me. Z3ta+ preset. Fail.

This needs mastered. Pleeeeease master this. And it needs EQ'd. It's like you just decided to throw a bunch of presets together with a major chord and called it a song. Again, this may come off as mean, but if you actually put time into your tracks and took advice from people who have spent countless hours producing, you'd say the same thing to someone else in your shoes. Just sayin'.

5/10
3/5

[[dannyNergy] Thank You ( wip )]

Almost there

Pros: - overall sweeeeeet
- more musical than what i've heard previously from you
- catchy

Cons: - The EQ needs more attention (like the main lead(s) can be brought out a bit more)
- A secondary harmonic lead could be used to make it even more melodic (that's just a suggestion)

Overall, pretty good man. I'm looking forward for the full version!
Derrick

dannyNergy responds:

Thanks man , Actually this was more so submitted for the sole purpose to show that ( one ) lead can do wonders if you know how to work and tweak your synth right.

I was just having fun creating a multi textured lead and got this catchy ass lead stuck in my head all night :)

[[dannyNergy]dontcrossthestream]

Awesome stuff

The good things on this track:

The samples on this are just awesome.

The track keeps moving quite nicely, and doesn't get boring anywhere. Nice genre pick, I <3 dnb, but I can't produce it to save my life. lol

So, here's the bad:

none. hahaha I dont know dnb well enough to pick out anything wrong. it all sounds goooood to me.

I'd love to hear another dnb track man. This is real good stuff.

5/5
10/10
Derrick

dannyNergy responds:

thwank you derrrock

[[PB] The Only Thing I Love]

Good overall

Overall, it's a good track.

The master track isn't bad, but it's not completely done from what I can hear.

Just a few tips to improve on: maybe put filters on the voice, maybe delays to keep the repeating voice interesting for the listener...cause a guy saying the same thing over and over can get a bit tire-some....haha

Another tip is to possibly put a bit more sub on that kick to make it really rock the house! And put a bit more EQ into the bass, it's really good on the higher frequencies, but when it gets a bit lower, it kinda makes me " :-/ " .

Now that the improving stuff is out of the way, here is what I liked:

- The vocals weren't too choppy, and were well in sync with the track.
- The fadeout was nice at the end of the track, it has some closure.
- To make this song sound like a real pro track, you actually dropped stuff out near the end to make the overall track mixable. Now the breakdown(s) could use more FX to lead in the kick and exit the kick (like in trance, you have your uplifts and downlifts).

that's about it....so yeah. lol

5/5
9/10

keep producing man. You're just getting better and better.
Derrick

PizzaBox responds:

Yeah, I think you're right about adding filters on the vocals. That would have been a good idea. I'll try to do something better with this track later.

More sub to the kick? Jeez, it was already maxing out, how much more do you want the house to be brought down? It was so loud I had to make everything else ridiculously loud just to be able to hear them over the kick. It was intense as it is! Haha.

Also, I didn't have a bass instrument. So not sure what to say in response to it sounding good on the high frequencies.

Thanks for the compliments though, Derrick. I really appreciate the time :)

Pizza[Box]

[Auecs- MISCHIEF!]

AWESOME TRACK!

I have to say this: BOO! to the guy below me******** WHO ADVERTISES THEIR WORK IN A REVIEW? HOW DARE YOU?!?!?

Otherwise, it's such a great track man, and I can't wait for the complete mix.

w00T!
Derrick

[Breathe [FINAL]]

nice breakdown

Other than the bad review below me (LOL) I would have to say that it has much more than "a beat, effects(lots) and sprinkles of noises..."

The bass is done very well, actually. Very house/electo-y. I just love when you build up, and when it kicks in, that bass/kick combo is pure amazing. Very good combination, and it flows nicely as well. To me, that's really what made this song appealing.

The effects you put in it (filters, etc) make the song fresh to those with ADD/ADHD, but it would still be good without them even (don't take them out, I just wanted to add that fact in for future reference).

Although this song is amazing, it could use a few tweaks that I would personally recommend:

- Use a different snare? It just doesn't seem to fit the style of house/electro that you chose. Or, you could just EQ the snare more to give it more of a washed out feeling, not that hard noise that you give it.

- Use more synths when you might feel that the song is "empty." This track is great, but it could definitely use more synths on top of the great foundation that you gave this already.

- A big less on the mid-range EQ of the bass. It just needs to be done... this track will sound more clean and fresh (listen to a few of my newer tracks if you want examples of the clean sound I'm talking about, and need be, I could show you myself).

- Work on the outro more, there's plenty of ways to end it not as abrupt as you chose. Just a few (classic) ways:
- fade out the whole track
- filter out (about the same thing)
- crash after 8-16 bars of perc outro (so the track is mix-able)
- use either the bass OR a synth (delay makes it sound sweet as well)
And the list goes on....

This track has great potential, and it seems like you have great potential, but just a few tweaks here and there and more practice will make you a good producer.

Also, if you want more tips on this track, I'll be glad to give you some (my AIM is on my NG page).

5/5
10/10
Derrick

[Artic / ICE \]

Wow

Hey dude,

Thanks for the message, cause to me, this is the closest track that you have that's trance! I think I hear some vanguard presets at some places, but it's no biggie. ;)

Just keep that bass rockin' and those synths fresh!

Derrick

DjMontana responds:

Hey man..

Well that`s a Relief ! This is the closest one to trance.... ! so i never got this close ??
hmmm well...bim a bit confused but ok....
I really like the tunes are so Deep.. wich gives it a moment were you wanna dream
away ! haha

But anyway im Glad you liked it :D ..happy ..happy !

Greetz DJMontana

[Airbase - Back [DJY]RMX]

v-station

Nice track, but I feel like your exp. with V-Station could still use some work. I mean, I've heard some amazing things come out of it, and I myself regularly use it for some amazing basses and for pads, and also leads on occasion.

Just keep at it, and you'll get there.

Derrick